This is a fable about a musical basketball player who invented a magic machine.
The Hippo that came from
Hogwarts
Once a upon a time their was a Hippo that went to Hogwarts. And he loved to play basketball and the guitar. he played with Steve Vai in musical school and with Leeroy Jenkins in the NBA. in the NBA their team was called the ratatars they won all their games. And the players in there team are Leeroy Jenkins.Hippo.Spongebob.Donald Trump.Hello Kitty.Shrek.Jacksepticeye.Markiplier.DanTdm.Lordminon777.Squidward. and Patrick.they have one more game to play against the golden state warriors the game starts at 8.42pm and the ratatars lost the game and then Harry Potter came too hippo with this time machine and then Hippo said what is this. and Harry Potter said back to him it is a time machine that I built in Hogwarts. I bought it here for you to go back in time to win the game against the golden state warriors. Good luck and once you have finished with the time machine send me a text and I will come around and get it ok.
Bye but wait I don’t have your Number said Hippo oh no how am I going to let him no when I am finished with the time machine. And also how do I use the time machine. Then along came Leeroy Jenkins and he saw the time machine and he said I remember when Harry Potter built that time machine then Hippo said he gave it to me so we can go back in time and beat the golden state warriors don’t tell anyone that we are going back in time Said Hippo. meet me at pak n save tomorrow at 10.30am don’t be late or you are not coming with me in the time machine. 12 hours later. He is not here yet and it is 10.37am and I told him to be here at 10.30am said hippo. Oh well I’m just going to have to go without him. ok i’m hopping in the time machine.i’m setting the time as 8.42pm of the 5/4/2016 and he hit the button as hard as he could but something went horribly wrong he broke the time machine and it took Harry Potter three years to build that time machine and then in Pack n save Steve Vai was doing his weekly shop and he saw the time machine and saw Hippo and he said sup bro sith. what you up to. Then Hippo said hiiiiii then Steve Vai said what is wrong with you Hippo than Hippo said I broke the time machine so now I can’t give it back to Harry Potter who made the time machine and he told me to be careful with it.
Well I think Harry Potter won’t know that it is broken or will he said Hippo. all you gotta do is just put like some kind of red tea towel over the button in the time machine so Harry Potter won't know that it is broken and then everything will be ok said Steve Vai. And anyway do you wanna come over to my place and jam some guitar with me because I made a new song called shy boy. So do you want to come over to my place Hippo said Steve Vai ok then but you got to help me pack up the time machine. All done said Hippo now let’s go to your Naboo starfighter and play some guitar. So now thay are both opening their christmas presents . oh wait wrong story.
hello Lucas I like how your story is very long and it has lot's of pictures and I like the hippo and the stupid Donald trump I know everyone hates him but he sort of call when it comes to speeches anyway you can improve on editing your work and seeing if it makes sense
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Hi Lucas, I'm Zach a Year 5 from St Bernadette's School. I really like the creativity that went into your story. It was cool how you put in a lot of characters. How did Harry Potter know that Hippo had lost the game? Why didn't you add in some more of the other characters like Hello Kitty and Donald Trump? I can't wait to hear more from you.
ReplyDeletehi Lucas i'm louis from yaldhurst school liked how you wrote heaps of words. but you should add more to the end. but i liked how you used a hippo in the story bye
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